Even if your submission is this short it should have a loader or play button so that it doesnt pointlessly loop forever
like the loading page
this was absolutely amazing piece of catfish
this was enterely horrible deliberaly
but this was the most inpiring piece i seen in a while.
Good sound selection
The animation itself was flawless
The Plot was exciting
The pace could have stayed a bit more constant like the beginning took forever for them to start the fight.
Next time try to show why they are fighting because in a world full of action you shoot first ask questions later.
Was a little on the short side and didnt quite enjoy the short but action packed fight could have had more in my opinion.
Think this is some of the better sprite animations i seen recently. keep up the good work and hope to see your next animation!!!
This is great!!
Best fright build up i seen for a while.
you did excellent on your choice of sound which is how you get scared in the first place. Seeing a monster doesnt scare you, it popping up is just a cheap scare, but sound it can get you on the edge of your seat and force you to endure both the thrilling suspence and the horrific images.
talking about images that is the only thing that i felt you could have touched up such as the scene after you enter the code is kind of weak but im sure i dont need to tell you that.
Great job and keep it up!!
Yeah, I was really happy with the music that I found, and I really concentrated on the sound quite a bit, and I didn't have a huge amount of time so it's a little bit slap-dash, but thanks a lot for the review, I really appreciate it.
Ok so here are something that i instantly noticed:
The sound is continuing even after the flash is done so you want to use a bit of ActionScript and just place a mute all sounds command on the frame before the flash ends.
Credits are nice make sure you have them so that you can show your appreciation towards any inspirations and other people that helped the flash. Remember the more you encourage others the more they will in part encourage your work.
Make sure this is finishing work. I know that I shouldnt be talking because my first submission was a demo but NG frowns upon unfinished work or eps and will blam it trust me. Put some work, Time, and LOTS OF LOVE and you flash will grow and be just as amazing. remember this is a hobby not a job at the moment so just have fun bro.
Your transitions could have been just a bit faster paced and a bit more organized because i did not get anything in the beginning.
You actually have SOUNDS!!! this is so important a flash without sound is no better than a GIF loop that can be clicked to start.
YOU HAVE A PRELOADER!!! YES I HATE WHEN MOVIES LOOP unintetionally.
Your story seems solid enough to build a series or arcs for growing support and fan base.
you have the perfect set up for everything.
Does have potential.
So in all i think you did a good job remember can always teach someone how to draw, paint, animate, voice act, or anything technical.... but you will never be able to teach them how to be creative and use their imagination to improve.
Good Work and Good Luck next time.
Thank you for your review. Really helpful. I'll keep it in mind
Seriously... i like the animation but beyond that everything was crap...
The flash had 1 transition...
You used terrible font with way too much contrast that pretty much made the ONLY text and speech in the flash hard to understand.
You Should make atleast the flash have a proper ending not just let the loop end at the end...
And you dont give any credit at all >:\
Flash animators that use sprites are useless without spriters so atleast give them credit dammit...
other than all that i liked the fighting scenes themselves but make sure the pace and transitions go smoothly not your suddenly standing still and they are breaking the sound barrier in less than a second. Try to imagine someone was recording them actually fighting and holding the cam. They wouldnt always stay on 1 screen and they wouldnt always catch up so quickly... Just my 2 cents.
Hope you do better next time.
This is just a preview, I intend to give the authors credit in the final version, and that will be done probably before the end of the month, two, I kinda see some errors with a few areas, like shadows chaos control, and I will fix that so it could run smoother in the final version, thanks for pointing the errors out.
Loved the theme!!
I mean honestly we need more stuff like this in for NGs.
The work up and set up where spotless. The way you could tell the main characters thoughts also helped a bunch. The friend was kind of freaky to be honest he had a picture of what looks like the cousin of the dead guy.
What i would suggest for the next one get better timing on the soundtrack. The fact of the matter is that when you are scared of something it is usually something you dont see directly while you can still hear it coming, you can still see its shadow approach, you can still recognize its heavy breathing and sudden actions in this case.
I would suggest you watch old horror movies not the new ones and see what they do to get the audience ready for the scare without showing the monster in the scene then, for example, he will pop out and go for the kill once the character thinks he is safe. Good work but definitely looking forward to your next work.
I'l give you a 7/10 for now but you have a guarenteed review for your next flash.
Love the art
The theme is original. I mean who doesnt love adorable demon hamsters that can do sorcery?
The voice acting even if i didnt understand it seemed smooth
the animation could have transitioned a bit slower but i understand that it become irritating to work on something that people will dislike and you launch a intro to get some comments and feedback on the work but it is best to send this kind of thing before you start a huge project to get some feed back on the characters, story, and enviroment from other things.
His brother doesn't have any noticeable that specifically distinguish him from his brother other than his hair. Please make that character be a bit more unique even though i understand they are brothers they still are not twins with dyed hair.
Keep up the good work and will look forward to seeing the full animation in a couple of weeks so cya soon.
Thank you! This is a real constructive comment that i like to read! Thanks for the ideas and i'll be sure to make a full episode soon. Bye! =)
Nice comeback for Germaine
I was also thinking her character needed a change.
The one thing i love the most is the way u give stories out. I mean even though this might be a bit bland right now it feels that these cartoons are more like a way to vblog out to the world or express yourself or your friend's experiences.
The art was never important to me to be honest because the rest made up for it. You always have had your own style and it is definitely fitting to use it. cartoons aren't all about who can draw the best or sprite, stick figures, and comedy flashes wouldn't be where they are.
Overall i have to give it a 8 because of how short it was.
Pretty damn good but....
hobbies turn out to be passions sometimes... I think you definitely have the potential to be a great sprite artist just keep going at it no matter what.
About your flash:
+inspiration is definitely there
+Effects where pretty good for a starter flash
+The background was pretty well done
-repetitive fight (As in i see this kind of fight over and over)
-could use better effects
-lack of loaders
-representation of sprites (as in where did you get the sprites from)
Liked your work and will be looking forward to seeing more of your future creations. Thanks for posting this definitely made me happy =]
I'm giving you a 7/10 Good Job bro ^^
Thanks for giving me your review.I'm gonna try to do a lot better next time and I am going to try to fix the sound and the loops.My problem is that i don't know many things about the program and I'm watching different tutorials on youtube to learn.But anyway thanks for watching and it definitely made me happy that you liked!!!!
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